>>39120117>I hope this explains it
Yeah, that makes sense, I'd say that I do something similar. I seem to just rate 'sweet and wholesome' show-like stuff a notch (or several notches) higher than you do even if it's not 'impactful' but that comes down to personal preference.
For me the Twilight-Dash interactions were super cute and the story was a cool enough idea to bump it a grade. If it didn't 100% click for you then 8/10 or even a 7/10 is very reasonable. Handing 10/10s to too many stories makes the scoring system pointless.
I only asked because 7/10 looked a low next to what looked like a very positive review.>>39120161>"You conniving whore" - really? Why the swear?
Oh, I forgot about it but the random one-of swear is never a good idea.>I made a note about this the first time it happened, but honestly, I found it easy to follow.
The perspective changes always happen after a break in text so you can't really miss them and it quickly becomes obvious whose head are we in.>defeating the monster wasn't the point though, redeeming Sombra was. I just think there should have been a lot more build up.
I probably said it in a very roundabout way but I mostly agree with that. The issue is that the monster is presented as the big problem to solve and then kinda just dies without doing anything, really. Sombra's redemption only becomes obvious a good few chapters into the story.>Also, I didn't read Reading Rainbow. Sorry, book club.
It's less than 5k words, try it sometime.>>39120205>My intent there was to show the emotional climax.
I'm with the Vinylflag on this one, suddenly adding a swear to an otherwise show-adjacent fics is pretty jarring.
But we've had this discussion itt a few weeks ago and it's not a question with a right and wrong answer.>>39120262>the perspective of this undercover villain before he slowly warms up to the ponies. Part of why I'd want a sequel shipfic
Would be a cool idea but you'd lose out on the undercover villain aspect of it. Slowly growing out of the "once I get my powers back I'll enslave you all reeee" is a big part of the appeal for me. Though they weren't all that relevant to the story's plot, Izzy's scenes had the potential to branch off into a different fic. Though by that point you're just a step away from writing regular HiE Isekai garbage.